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PostSubject: An Attempt At The Poem (I am afterall, a risk taker.)   Sat Jan 24, 2009 5:23 pm

I've been playing with poetry of late... here is one that turned out kind of interesting. Any and all criticism would be most appreciated. (Somewhat gentle would be nice though. It's kind of scary posting poetry!) This poem is a bit pensive, a bit meloncholy... but that's often the flavor of the mid-winter blues, mais non?

Rethinking What I Think I Might Know

In this ravel of lines and leaders,
there is time to dream familiar dreams:
re-dreaming the dreamt reveals
the politics of pursuit.

Some days there is redemption,
but mostly just
sheerness
and
determination.

I.
In the green of summer I arrive unbroken,
breathless,
my tread light and fly box full.
I become a prospector, a stealthy predator,
a hunter of painfully wary prey.

Often, I lose myself on familiar waters.

II.
In the months of autumn
I stalk the cut-banks and riffles,
reconnoiter the plunges pools,
analyze the currents where
the secret feeder streams merge and mingle.
The structure of the streambed, though
hidden by turbulence and fallen pine,
is as clear to me as the geography
of my own neighborhood.

My system of positioning is global,
though the angling remains local.

III.
Come spring, there is great anticipation.
Clean fly line, wrap hackle smartly
to shank of hook, organize vest;
renaissance and ramble are in the air.
Lucidly, I will ponder worn trails
that lead to prime lies

The rivers are impatient,
swollen with mountain run-off.

IV.
Winter finds me here,
knowing little, dreaming much.
A January chill lurks just outside
the glow of my kitchen window.
In these hours darkest of midnight dreams,
I am visited by lovers lost,
haunted by specters of regret,
re-visited byall those fish captured,
and then released --
Am I the hunter,
or the hunted?

Somewhere,
there are trout rising.
And I am fishing.
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PostSubject: Re: An Attempt At The Poem (I am afterall, a risk taker.)   Sat Jan 24, 2009 10:28 pm

TB,

I read this earlier... I like how it is personal and reflects your passion... It left me thinking why? Why are the seasons not in order... then I thought well that's for me to interpret... Each reader can take from it what they want or see... that's the way it should be, mais non?

For me, it's a reminder that perhaps things aren't as ordered as we'd like or want...
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PostSubject: Re: An Attempt At The Poem (I am afterall, a risk taker.)   Sat Jan 24, 2009 10:32 pm

Very good!
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PostSubject: Re: An Attempt At The Poem (I am afterall, a risk taker.)   Sat Jan 24, 2009 10:44 pm

I like it, although I've never been one for poetry. It leaves me with the thought that life is about our little passions. It's what makes it worth living and gives up purpose. Purpose after all being a uniquely human idea.

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